Re: Please proofread text for design competition !

From: e_e_ling_at_h...
Date: 2001-05-04 11:01:27


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50 WORDS summary [change to] WORD
300 WORDS summary [change to] WORD

FEASABILITY [change to] FEASIBILITY

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FIR CACH modality???
Solution to problem 3 - not finished
Maximum software flexibility is MADE [change to] ACHIEVED
One of the first open source embedded software [change to] one of the
first EXAMPLES OF open source embedded software
NEARLY WEEKLY IMPROVEMENTS [change to] REGULAR IMPROVEMENT
IN THE LEAST AMOUNT possible [change to] AS LITTLE AS possible

normally non-sensible biological signals are measured and then
transformed in a domain accessible by our senses [change to]
biological functions normally beyond our control are measured and fed
back to the user in a format he/she can understand, such as an audio
or visual signal

...James A Peterson what he believes to be possible [change to] James
A Peterson ON what he believes to be possible

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Biofeedback - an amazing PSYCHOLOGICAL technology is capable of many
things. Many of them just by buying a machine and working with
it!![change to] Biofeedback, an amazing PIECE OF PHYSIOLOGICAL
technology, has a great many benefits, and all that is required is
regular use of the equipment.

because little MAKRET, high development costs [change to] because the
MARKET is very small and the development costs are very high.

so we decided [change to] We therefore decided

we develop for free a biofeedback machine [change to] We are
developing a non-profit biofeedback machine

people WOULD benefit [change to] people WILL benefit

Solution to problem 1 - not finished

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Our design looks like straight out of a book on digital signal
processing - badly worded... what are you trying to say?

ACOUSTICAL [change to] ACOUSTIC

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ACOUSTICAL [change to] ACOUSTIC

3.3 not finished

Not all 24 bits have to be used for [change to] Not all 24 bits have
to be used.

ARTEFACT removal - is this the right word (I don't know!)

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3.6.1 software could be written to STORAGE data [change to] STORE

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3.6.2 WAY of communication [change to] MEANS

3.9 (sleep research : missing ")"

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ACOUSTICAL [change to] ACOUSTIC

3.10.1 CONNECTIONS with the microcontroller [change to] CONNECTION

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3.12.1 DEVIDED [change to] DIVIDED

3.1.3 Sinter material - is this the right word (I don't know!)

3.14 maximum amount of safety [change to] maximum safety

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INTENTIONALY [change to] INTENTIONALLY



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